Characters
BEN: early-thirties, clean cut, business suit
FOOD DELIVERY MAN: early-twenties
SETTING
Ben's living room. The room has an antique desk
and chair set in the corner. There's a Persian rug
in the middle of the floor. There's a bookshelf on
the far wall facing the audience. It is full,
carefully lined with wildlife animals such as a
giraffe, panda, elephant, wolf etc. They're
realistic, but obviously children's toys and made
from various materials, plastic, ceramic, wood,
etc. The combination of animals doesn't matter, as
long as there's at least a LION with a mane.
SCENE
Lights up. Dim. BEN walks in, and puts briefcase
on desk. He takes off his coat, and sets it around
the chair. He slowly walks across the shelf, and
stops to pat one of the animals.
BEN: (to all animals in general): I saw Chris at the
store. I looked up and there he was across the produce
section. We caught eyes...long enough for his face to
say "I'm sorry." It's been six months and I'm tired of
seeing that face. And it isn't just Chris. It's
everyone...No, I didn't say anything. I left. We used
to be good friends. But now all he can do is say sorry
and leave voicemails inviting me to go golfing. If I
didn't like golfing before Rebecca died, why would I
like it now?
Silence for a moment, then BEN turns around, and
grabs LION off the shelf.
BEN: Yes, I said "died." What are you suggesting,
Charles?...Shh. That's not true. Where's your respect?
She didn't...It wasn't on pur-I don't understand. Shh.
Quiet. Stop.
BEN shakes his head.
BEN: Don't think about that. Remember. She's the one
who brought you here. Sure, it was my idea to open a
wildlife preserve. Yeah, one day, Becca and I were
going to go to Africa and Asia and wherever else the
real life versions of you exist. She put you here as
little reminders of how our lives would be different.
She promised. We were going to go together.
BEN sits on rug with LION in his lap.
BEN: It sounded crazy, getting together some scientists
and buying some land,but helping animals is a better
cause than helping people. People are too good at
messing themselves up, messing each other up. Rebecca
thought so too. Even if my dream sounded crazy to my
mom or my brother, and of course I never told
Chris-even if it seemed stupid to everyone else, Becca
said it was gonna happen. And I loved her for that.
Silence and then BEN shakes LION.
BEN: Be quiet. Please, be quiet, Charles. Yes, I did
say "loved." But what do you expect? I want to say I
feel her around me, but I don't.
BEN looks at LION again.
BEN: No. I'm not forgetting her!
BEN throws LION across the room. It breaks, but he
doesn't notice at first.
BEN: I'm not forgetting her. Rebecca isn't here,
Charles. I don't understand it, either. She was. But
now she's not. There's nothing anyone can do. There's
nothing I can do...Well...there is one thing. I've been
afraid of that stuff. That junk. That shit that stole
her from me. I've been thinking. Maybe if I had
understood her better, this would never have happened.
Maybe I can still understand.
BEN sets stands up and walks over to his desk and
opens drawer. At the same time, FOOD DELIVERY MAN
appears onstage and KNOCKS on BEN's door. BEN
shuts drawer. KNOCKING continues. BEN goes to door
and opens it a crack. BEN stands in silence. FOOD
DELIVERY MAN holds some Styrofoam boxes in a
plastic bag.
FOOD DELIVERY MAN: Here's your dinner.
BEN stares.
FOOD DELIVERY MAN: Your dinner.
BEN: I didn't place an-
FOOD DELIVERY MAN: Look, I'm not up for your games. Not
tonight. We both know every Tuesday your mama calls up
Chinese Panda and has us deliver you some dinner. Pays
for it by phone and has us deliver it to you.
BEN: I didn't-
FOOD DELIVERY MAN: I got more places to go. Just take
the food, man.
BEN: Let me check with my...
BEN trails off as he closes the door in FOOD
DELIVERY MAN's face. A few KNOCKS then FOOD
DELIVERY MAN leaves bag outside the door. BEN
walks back to desk and pulls out cotton, alcohol
swabs, syringe, spoon, tiny package, etc. from the
desk and sits on the middle of the rug.
BEN: You left all this, Bec. Did you want me to find
it? I had to search online to find out what
all this was for, and then I looked up how to do it,
how you did it. You'd be surprised how the world is
filled with helpful druggies, just ready to teach
someone how to shoot up. Ones who say they can
"function in society." Or maybe you wouldn't be
surprised. You were one of them, weren't you? When we
first started dating you told me, straight out, "Ben, I
had a problem. But I'm better now." And that was that.
You never mentioned it again. You promised you were
happy. But then...after five whole years...then...
BEN closes his eyes.
BEN: I found her here. She did it here.
BEN unwraps tiny package, places contents on
spoon. BEN's PHONE RINGS. He's surprised and then
sets spoon and contents down on rug. He answers
phone and listens for a moment.
BEN: What? Lucy? Is that you?... I'll see you at the
office tomorrow morning...A movie? But it's...what time is it?
... Yes, seven P.M...Yes,I'm busy. I'm in the middle of cooking.
(Long Pause)
BEN: Yes, ok. Have your presentation ready for the
board in the morning.
BEN puts his phone away, then looks at junk etc.
BEN: I'm forgetting something.
BEN sets SPOON AND CONTENTS down on rug. Exits
Stage. Few moments. Then BEN returns with a glass
of water and sets it down next to junk etc.
BEN: I'm forgetting something else...Charles? Charles!
Where are you?
BEN sees LION across the room. Walks over and
picks it up.
BEN: No. No. No. Your tail. Shoot. Your tail! Shit.
It's broken. I promised her I'd keep you safe, Charles,
and now your tail's broken off. I didn't mean it.
BEN turns LION towards him so they're face to
face.
BEN: Do you really think she meant it? But she promised
us. She promised me she was better...And now what? What
am I supposed to do?
BEN sits on rug and sets LION down, faces it
opposite him.
BEN: I've just got to understand.
BEN prepares the rest of the junk and holds needle
to his arm.
BEN: She never told me. I've got to understand.
Lights down.
Long Pause.
Lights up.
Ben is passed out on the floor with LION in his
hand. Bookshelf is empty and there's a big
cardboard box next to it.
Lights down.
END
I liked how I was able to read it without wanting to stop reading. The character had me wondering and guessing what was going to happen. Also, the character was so open that you couldn't help but care what was going to happen. You did an awesome job at connecting the reader with the character. The only thing I didn't really understand was the role the delivery man played and the ending. Also, I would have liked for the phone conversation to have gone on a little longer, or to maybe have had it been his mother.Also, I kind of wish that maybe he would have gone into even more specific details about his loved one that died, maybe he could have related more events or little things that he remembered about her.
ReplyDeleteYou really got me hooked at the very beginning and I did not want to stop reading. I thought Ben's dialogue was well written and I really liked the idea of the story. I understand that Ben and Rebecca wanted to open a wildlife preserve but I was wondering if there was any significance of the lion with the mane (maybe I missed it? Was in Rebecca's favorite animal?)since that animal was specifically mentioned in the stage directions and that was the one he talked to. Also maybe you could mention or show how Ben's relationship is with his mother and why she sends him food every Tuesday.
ReplyDeleteThis has been one of my favorite pieces so far. With only one character talking to a lion, you are able to convey a very powerful message about the effect that drugs take on a family structure. Your tone throughout the story is very somber, which can be difficult to do.
ReplyDeleteThe setting also helps out a lot with this piece. It shows that he is unwilling to move past this relationship, and that he has been hampered by these feelings since his spouse left. These animals become his only friend, and he becomes delusional enough to talk to them.
My biggest problem with the piece is the ending. I ge that he shot up, and possibly died, but I don't understand the box next to the book shelf. Is this supposed to indicate that he died and people are cleaning out his place? Because that would be a bit insensitive. Also, the delivery man seems a little forced. I would like to see you either elaborate on that or just get rid of it.
I really liked this piece because it kept me reading. There was never a dull moment! however, i really want to see more details in the dialog because I felt like I wanted to know more about the relationship between him and his loved one that died. So, I think it just needs a few specific details.
ReplyDeleteLike everyone else said, once i started reading i didn't want to stop. I also think the descriptions of the characters were very clear and the dialogue was great.
ReplyDeleteI kind of didn't understand the end, but that could just be me.